In the graph below, we have graph that shows in percentage changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom.

In the graph below, we have graph that shows in percentage changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom.
The line graph provides information about patterns of domestic use of contemporary technology in the UK over a period of 8 years. 
It is clear that
all the sectors,
such
as CD player, Mobile phone, Home computer, and Internet access, showed steady increases during the whole timeframe.
Also
,
CD
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player was used the most in
this
country all the time across the four technologies.
First,
the Internet appeared only between 1998 and 1999,
whereas
the other existed since 1996. The proportion of internet access rose from around 10% to 42%, comprising a gap of 32%. At the same time, that of mobile
device
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increased by almost 45%, which was the biggest gap among those.  Focusing on the first two years, it can be seen that
home
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computer was the second most popular technology in households in the United Kingdom.
However
,
mobile
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phone took over the place in 1999.
Furthermore
,
cellphone
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was
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the only thing that experienced an unstable tendency until the end.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • changing patterns
  • domestic access
  • modern technology
  • homes
  • United Kingdom
  • trend
  • acceleration
  • socioeconomic factors
  • income levels
  • educational attainment
  • correlation
  • internet access
  • personal computers
  • digital connection
  • computing
  • drop
  • plateau
  • asymptotic behavior
  • saturation
  • emergence
  • innovation
  • adoption rates
  • households
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