The charts below show the protein and calorie intakes of people in different parts of the world.

The charts below show the protein and calorie intakes of people in different parts of the world.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the protein and calorie intakes of people in different parts of the world.
The bar charts show the information
of
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average
protein
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and
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calories
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calorie
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intake from four different groups of people across the world: India, East Africa, Latin
America
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and North
America
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.
Overall
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, it is clearly observed that Indian
peoples
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people
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eat alternative
proteins
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than
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animal
protein
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,
whereas
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that of people from North
America
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opt for animal
protein
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.
However
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, it is interesting to note that North Americans consume
highest
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the highest
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calories
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number of calories
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among all other groups. A closer look at the bar chart
can be seen
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that North American people eat animal
proteins
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the most
as well as
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other
proteins
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at 62 and 18, respectively. Followed by that of Latin
America
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at 32 and 13.
While
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both
Indian
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Indians
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and East Africans share the same figures for consuming other
proteins
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at 15,
Indian
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Indians
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consume fewer animal
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protein
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proteins
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3
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at 3
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fewer
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apply
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. In regards to
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calories
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calorie
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intake, as expected, North Americans consume roughly 3,500 Kcal which is the highest of all four regions,
hence
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,
that
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apply
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of
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India
by
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far the fewest at 2,000 Kcal.
Similarly
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, the other two
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calories
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calorie
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intake
on
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average at approximately 2,200 in East Africa and nearly 3,000 in Latin
America
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words protein, calories, america, proteins with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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