In many countries today children begin learning a foreign language before entering primary school. What are the reasons for this? At what age should children begin to learn a foreign language?

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Nowadays, many parents want their child to learn
other
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other languages
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language
before starting
school
.It can be the result of
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acknowledging
knowing
how important it is to learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
beside
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mother
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the mother
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language
in today's society and how much it is essential for their
children
's future.
Although
some people believe that learning any lesson including
language
at early age like pre
school
would be beneficial, in my opinion studying foreign
languages
before learning how to write
mother
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the mother
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language
migh
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might
have
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effect.
Researches
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shows that knowing other
languages
have
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impact on gaining new jobs and promotions
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therefore
parents tend to invest
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their
children
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teaching them
this
new norm skill to their child and mostly
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they
are under
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of other parent's actions and observing how they opt to provide best classes for their youngers, they would get the impression that learning other
languages
might contribute to long term
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success
which lead to better opportunities.
Moreover
, other than countries
that
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their
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native
language
is English, other countries have to know basic English for
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travelling
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and international business or
immagriting
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immigrating
abroad
for studying
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to study
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higher level degrees at universities so starting to learn from
early
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age would bring them closer to their goals. Many people believe
children
can obtain different skills better than adults
however
, enforcing
children
to learn other
languages
before learning their
mother
language
might make them confused and frustrated when they try to write in
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school
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and in the
end
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they won't be able to be fluent both in their
mother
language
and foreign
language
.As far as
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am concerned, it
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true that learning from young age has benefits but
school
lessons
specificly
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specifically
native
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the native
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language
should be piriotize
for instance
,
instead
of
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school
classes, after
first
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grades
children
should start taking other
language
classes. In conclusion, in
advancing
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world we now live indeed it is crucial to learn other
languages
which
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us with different chances in future competitions
such
as job searching, but it should be avoided before the child learn their own
language
.
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