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The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in five parts of the world in 2006.

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The graphs give data on the intake and cultivation of
potatoes
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 in various continents of the world - South and Central
America
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,
Africa
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, North
America
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,
Europe
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, and
Asia
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 - in 2006.
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, it is evident that the bigger consumption of
potates
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potatoes
 was observed in
Europe
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 and
Asia
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,
whereas
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this
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 figure for lower indicators was in
Africa
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.
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, the most significant production of
potatoes
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 was in
Europe
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 and
Asia
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 though
this
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 figure for South and Central
America
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, and
Africa
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 was less. Looking in more detail,
Europe
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 was
leader
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 as opposed to other countries in terms of eating
potatoes
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, with 96.1
kg
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 per
person
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.
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,
this
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 pattern for North
America
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 was 57.9
kg
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 per
person
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.
In contrast
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, potato consumption was significantly lower in
Asia
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,
South
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and South
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 and Central
America
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, with 25.8 and 23.6
kg
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 per
person
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, respectively.
Likewise
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,
Africa
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 was the outsider at 14.1
kg
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 per
person
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. With regard to the planting
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potatoes
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of potatoes
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,
this
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 figure accounted for 131.2 and 126.3
million
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tones
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tonnes
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, in
Asia
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 and
Europe
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, respectively.
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, North
America
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produce
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produced
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 24.7
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 of
potatoes
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 in 2007,
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 16.4
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 of
potatoes
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was
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were
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 cultivated in
Africa
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. In 2007, the least production was witnessed in South and Central
America
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, with 15.6
million
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tones
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tonnes
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words potatoes, america, africa, europe, asia, kg, person, million, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural capacity
  • Dietary preferences
  • Cultural significance
  • Economic affordability
  • Trade policies
  • Food security
  • Production levels
  • Consumption patterns
  • Imbalance
  • Global agricultural trends
  • Technological advancements
  • Supply chain enhancements
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