IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
The given line chart provides information on
who
Correct word choice
how
show examples
 many visitors
who
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
visited a Caribbean
islandy
Correct your spelling
island
show examples
 by staying on a Peninsula and staying on cruise ships over a
7 year
Add a hyphen
7-year
show examples
 period.
Overall
Linking Words
 from Perspective, It is a
readity
Correct your spelling
reality
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
apparent that the highest number of tourists visited the place in total throughout the period. In 2010, visitors who settled down on
archipelago
Correct article usage
the archipelago
show examples
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
wittnessed
Correct your spelling
witnessed
upward
Correct article usage
an upward
show examples
 trend, starting from well over 0.5
million
Use synonyms
 to reaching
Correct article usage
a apeak
show examples
apeak
Correct your spelling
peak
show examples
at
Change preposition
of
show examples
 2
million
Use synonyms
 people by 2017.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the number of travellers who
stetteld
Correct your spelling
settled
 on cruise ships
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 was experienced
adramatic
Correct your spelling
a dramatic
dramatic
 increase at about 2
million
Use synonyms
, which was a
half time
Add a hyphen
half-time
show examples
 higher than the
visitors
Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
show examples
 on
Add an article
the
show examples
island, by 2017. In total, The figure
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
travellors
Correct your spelling
travellers
 showed a
significantly
Change the adverb
significant
show examples
Correct quantifier usage
number of rice
show examples
rice
Correct your spelling
rise
show examples
, which
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
started from 1
million
Use synonyms
 in 2010 leading to 3.5
million
Use synonyms
 people, in 2017.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
What to do next:
Look at other essays: