The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The given line chart provides information on how many visitors visited a Caribbean island by staying on a Peninsula and staying on cruise ships over a 7-year period.
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readily apparent that the highest number of tourists visited the place in total throughout the period. In 2010, visitors who settled down on the archipelago witnessed an upward trend, starting from well over 0.5
million
to reaching
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of 2
million
people by 2017.
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, the number of travellers who settled on cruise ships
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experienced a dramatic increase
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about 2
million
, which was a half-time higher than the number of visitors on the island, by 2017. In total, The figure for travellers showed a significant rise, which started from 1
million
in 2010 leading to 3.5
million
people, in 2017.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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