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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.
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Overall
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,
it is clear that
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while
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 in the morning
time
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 in both categories the most common things were housework,shopping,and job hunting, in the
afternoon
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time
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 there were some differences between
women
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 and
men
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. Job hunting remained the same among the male and female populations.
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, there was a striking distinction in gardening between
men
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 and
women
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, which does not depend on the part of the
day
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. Regarding housework in the morning
time
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 among both
women
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 and
men
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, there were 49% and 19% respectively. In the
afternoon
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time
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,
this
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 activity drastically increased , with females at 21%, and males at 7%.
Whereas
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shopping remained popular in the female population all
day
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, 26% in the morning,17% in the
afternoon
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time
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,
men
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 preferred morning
time
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 20% and 9% in the
afternoon
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. There was no striking difference in the percentage of job hunting during the
day
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 among the whole population, especially
afternoon
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 12% for
women
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, and 13% for
men
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. Meanwhile, gardening remained the most common thing among
men
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 throughout the
day
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,14% -morning
time
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,13%- tea
time
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.
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according to
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 drinking, which is a less common thing in the population, there were 2% among
men
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 and 3% among
women
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 in the morning, and 1% for both at tea
time
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.
On the other hand
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 significant difference was between morning and
afternoon
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 in staying in bed- 8% and 1% respectively but without any distinction in gender.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, afternoon, women, men, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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