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Wealthy nations should assist poor countries with humanitarian the leaf during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree?

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countries
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 should facilitate the undeveloped
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 during
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times of natural catastrophe by providing humanitarian support
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 statement because wealthy nations are well equipped to support and it pays the weight for
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 connection between two nations. Developed
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 have vast amounts of sources to help. Those are in need during difficult times
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 to see these
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 can have multiple resources that can be easily lent to other
countries
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 to save them from hard times they can provide food money
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 help build community shelters for those in need
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, America recently helped Florida to survive the deadly hurricane by supplying food and first aid kits through choppers. Helping poor nations by providing them with basic necessities can initiate
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 strong
convection
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connection
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 between two
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. They can help each other in making connections and sharing each other's resources to build and
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grow their
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,
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 forming a connection can become a crucial part of
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 development, it will
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 set a good example for
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countries
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 to look up to and be helpful to each other. In conclusion, I profoundly believe that developed and economically stable
countries
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 should help their poor fellow
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 during
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time
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 of natural disasters by providing them with basic necessities
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 as money, food, and first aid kits and doing so may end up forming a strong connection that will be beneficial for both
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coherence cohesion
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The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps set the scope and wrap up the discussion effectively.
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You successfully identified key points on why wealthy nations should assist poorer countries, and supported them with relevant considerations.
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The argument about forming strong connections between countries is well-made and adds depth to the discussion.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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