Some people belive that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an satisfactory job or shortage of Money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is ongoing debate about accepting any type
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situation
is
best
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the best
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to live a
life
while
other
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others
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reject with formal notion and argue that
instead
of accepting bad or good
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situations
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it is better to enhance and fix the
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situation
.
According to
my point of
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view,
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individual
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individuals
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should always try and create more good
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opportunities
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.
This
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will
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further
explain my
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viewpoint
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about
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this
issue. On the one side, some people accept their situations and live their
life
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lives
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according to
their ways without any hustle and bustle. If people survive from
this
situation
they can do anything in their
life
.
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- In 2010, my friend's dad only did
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job under minimum wage but
still
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they
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it and made budgets
according to
the
situation
and they are surviving
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life
without any lavish wishes and happy with that. On
other
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side, It is impossible to survive without any struggle and personal enhancement. They will feel poor if they do not courage
themselve
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themselves
to earn more money and fulfil their dreams. Learning
everyday
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and getting knowledge about
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the situtaion
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situtaion
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situation
really helped people to understand the meaning of living the best
life
. In
this
way
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way,
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they earn their name and reputation.
For example
, the
apple
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company always try their best and improve their phone quality every year and
in
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a results
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result
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results
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they earn what they spent.
According to
my
opinine
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opinion
, accepting the
situation
and
start
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starting
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working on the bad
situtaion
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situation
is the best. When you
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on
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bad
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a bad
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situation
you use your brain and do
hardwork
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hard work
which helps your body to stay active and healthy. It is
also
the best way to become
well-known
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a well-known
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person by putting
your
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efforts. In
conclustion
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conclusion
, both
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play different roles in everyone's
life
but it is
on
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up to
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the individual how they
are taking
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take
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and
dealing
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deal
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with them. Their one step can make them rich and poor. It totally
depend
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depends
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on them which path they want to walk.
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