Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinion in this?

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In recent years, the discussion surrounding fast
food
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has grown more prominent.
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some
people
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argue that increasing the popularity of fast
food
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has an advantage, others think that it has some drawbacks. In my opinion, I agree with the perspective because of two reasons.
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, the growth of the fast
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industry has created more job opportunities. When we think about a few years back, there were fewer delivery jobs in most
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cities but at
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we can see plentiful advertisements to recruit delivery drivers for restaurants or small cafes. As an example, the highest-demand occupation in Melbourne is drivers. So,
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the increase in the popularity of fast
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, more job opportunities have emerged.
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, there are collateral benefits
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this
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trend
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as a decline in
unemployment
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rate, or the government can reduce the subsidies for jobless
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.
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, most
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can increase their required nutrition easily because
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they can quickly
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food
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and the
food
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will
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it
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instantly. As an example, if a customer needs to consume some alcohol in the middle of the night they can order using fast
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delivery apps like Ubereats or Doordash.
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is one of the major advancements of fast
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.
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, consumers can buy everything that they need in day-to-day life via fast
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apps.
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, they can save time and enjoy their life or they can allocate their time in a productive way. In conclusion,
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,
people
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have different opinions on fast
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,
due to
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the increase in job opportunities and
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time wasted by the fast
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industry I think it has more positive impacts than
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negative aspects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Processed foods
  • Nutritional value
  • Chronic diseases
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Economic impact
  • Job creation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainability
  • Dietary habits
  • Consumerism
  • Mass production
  • Public health
  • Health-conscious
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