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The chart below shows the types of communication training taken by employees in an international company and the reasons why they took part in this training. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the types of communication training taken by employees in an international company and the reasons why they took part in this training. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie
chart
illustrate
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 employees had communication training
by
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 five different types in an international company. And the reason that they participated in
this
 training.
Overall
, in
first
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chart
, most people like to though Part-time Training(evening), which is
highest
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 number in communication training ways.
Whereas
, the lowest figure is the proportion of distant learning. In
second
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chart
, the most popular reason is that have
travel
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in
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the Holidays
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Holidays
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.
And the
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 percentages of
other
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 four types
have
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 not
much
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 different. In
first
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chart
,
the
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Part-Time(evening) has
highest
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 number among
five
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 options.
Additionally
, the numbers of Part-Time training(weekend) and
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self-tuition have the same proportion in all training ways, at 22%. And there is
a
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 lowest number in
distant
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 learning, at 5%. In
other
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,
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Holiday travel
have
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largest
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 proportion
in
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 several reasons, at 46%, which
nearly
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 half of
total
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.
By contrast
, the percentages of Communication With
Client
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Clients
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, Personal Interest, Business Travel and Other Reasons have similar data, at 10%, 14%, 17%, and 13% respectively.
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