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The table below shows consumer spending on different items in 5 countries in 2002.

The table below shows consumer spending on different items in 5 countries in 2002.
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The table compares
spendings
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spending
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 on three different aspects in five countries.
Overall
, most money was spent on food/drinks/tobacco in all five countries,
whereas
 leisure and
education
 had the lowest interest
rate
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. All five countries share the biggest interest in spending the most on food, drinks and tobacco. The percentage of money spent varied from 16% to 32%,
whereas
 clothing only had about
a
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7% on average and
education
 had the lowest rate of them all, only
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3%
average
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.
However
, the biggest differences are seen in the first column. Turkey had the biggest spending rate in terms of the first and third aspects of the table.
However
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 they were only the
second
 biggest consumers compared to Italy’s
spendings
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 on clothing and footwear, where they were the number one. The Irish had the
second
 biggest percentage in talks of food, drinks and tobacco only being down by 4% from Turkey and having 10%
on
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 Spain, which was in third place.
In
addition
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 Spanish people were
also
 in the middle in terms of clothing and footwear and in
last
 place when talking about leisure and
education
, by draining just less than 2% of their money on it.
Lastly
, the Swedish had the lowest percentage in terms of first and
second
 columns but they were in
second
 place in
education
 and leisure.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words education, second with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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