The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%)

The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%)
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The visual data show us the main problems of citizens in the urban
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in Great Britain in 2008. On the charts could be seen 7 major cities, where  huge 3 domains of living issues as air pollution, health services, educational and training.  By far, air pollution is the least reported issue, with the lowest band in Newcastle like 4-5% and the biggest range in Manchester, where
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thing appeared 3 times more often than in Newcastle.  The most remarkable part is the health services sector, which occurs for most cities more than 50
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, getting close to 60% in Belfast and Cardiff.
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, in
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it is still remarkable, but the range is lower than 50%  The
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noteworthy problem is the education and training part. Actually, even if it is lower than the health services sector, it could not be called tiny.
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, it started from the lowest point in Manchester somewhere like 45% and finished with
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-53% in London and Glasgow.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordable housing
  • urban areas
  • overcrowding
  • homelessness
  • traffic congestion
  • car ownership
  • public transportation systems
  • commuting times
  • air pollution
  • industrial activities
  • air quality
  • green spaces
  • urbanization
  • mental health
  • crime rates
  • socio-economic factors
  • sense of security
  • waste management
  • waste disposal
  • recycling
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