The diagram below show the process of producing smoked fish

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The process illustrates data about smoked

fishes'

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production.

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it is clear that

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the diagram has 13 steps,from fishing fish to deliver to the stores. The first three steps include information about fishing. If at the outset, fish are hunted with nets,

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the next

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two steps are distributed by boat to the port.

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, they are frozen in the containers and after

that

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they are thawed to the fresh water.

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after

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this

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stage,they cut from their heads and

then

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washed in

the

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apply

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salt water

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with yellow colours.

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, after smoking under the fire,they are packaged and frozen in 0

celsius

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again in the cold stores. After all of them, smoked fish

are

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put in the

mini vans

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minivans

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and transported to the ocean meat markets.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

123 words

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The diagram below show the process of producing smoked fish

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Some people think that employers should ensure a supportive and pleasant work environment where each employee is respected and valued equally while others think employers should focus instead on providing better facilities and equipment. what is your opinion?

The Government should be responsible for providing retirees with financial support and care. Whole many people think that citizens should save money to take care of themselves when they are old. Discuss both views and give your opinion

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the effects on family life and society?