Some individuals believe that higher education should be funded by the government.Others, however, argue that it ohs the responsibility of individuals to fund their education. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Education in almost all nations needs money to go as
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as possible,
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especially
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the costs get multiplied. In
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shall give my idea about if governments should be in charge or
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people themselves have
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responsible for the expanses.
To begin
with, there are a number of advantages to funding your own study plans, that
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think worth being noted. First of all, there might be a bigger variety when it comes to choosing your major. In
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,
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the education programs that are provided freely by the government, are limited and do not cover all the majors, or more often these
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of plans face a big demand.
For instance
, in some
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countries, people mostly pay attention to popular subjects like tech and biology,
while
other majors are less favoured.
Also
,
this
might cause an extra part to be included for entering the university as the demand
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up, like taking an
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entrance
exam.
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, making it harder even if the person wants to
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in one of the given programs.
On the other hand
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the education
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can not be
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easily
paid
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to higher prices for
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certain degrees like a PhD in biology, or maybe the person
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afford university fees at all. So, having the option to study with little to no cost is a great option to have.
Moreover
,
this
could
also
benefit the funder like an investment, simply by employing the individuals who have used the fund by a
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commitment
contract. As an example, we can see Italy, which spends millions of pounds each year on international students, so
then
those people go to work for it in return.
Lastly
, I tend to be on
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sides
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of the argument, as
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for
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that for
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the best results both options need to be present at the same time and it should be up
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to
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decide
to take the
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responsibilities
or sign up for
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programs.
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grammar spelling
Ensure consistency in verb tenses and avoid minor spelling errors like 'expanses' instead of 'expenses'.
coherence
Make sure each paragraph has a clear central idea, and avoid introducing unrelated points to maintain clarity.
introduction conclusion
Strengthen the introduction by clearly stating your thesis and your view on the topic.
task achievement
You have provided relevant and specific examples to support your arguments, such as the case of Italy.
task achievement
You have covered both sides of the argument, providing a complete response to the task.
coherence cohesion
The essay structure is logical, with distinct introduction, body, and conclusion sections.
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