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the plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today

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the plans below give some information about illustrating all the changes that have aquired in Porth harbour from 2000
and
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 present year.
overall
,some places have changed in the harbour since 2000
and
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adding many leisure facilities like cafes and shops and
renovation
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in
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the castle which
it
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has been a hotel on the south
the
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map.
firstly
, two maps indicate some information about restoring the harbour that
in
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 the
pas
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.
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,the marina(private
yatchs
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yachts
)and fishing boats switched to another location.
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 nowadays the entrance of the southern
carpark
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car park
 has been
rejuvanated
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rejuvenated
 to the main road on the west side . probing ahead,the public beach near
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the castle has
bees
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 converted to
the
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 private beach for the hotel.
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 a novel duck was created next to the other duck.
az
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 well
as
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in the left part of the map,the extra shower and toilet have
manufactured
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 between two car parks.
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grammar
Focus on improving grammatical accuracy, especially with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency.
clarity
Clarify your ideas by using simpler sentence structures and clearly indicating the changes, possibly with bullet points or lists, to break down complex information.
task achievement
The essay successfully identifies several significant changes in the harbour from 2000 to the present day, such as the addition of leisure facilities and renovation of the castle.
coherence
There is a logical attempt to describe changes in sequence, reflecting an understanding of how to compare past and present features.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multi-purpose building
  • recreational facilities
  • maritime safety
  • leisure destination
  • tourism-focused
  • infrastructure improvements
  • pedestrian promenade
  • landmark
  • expanded roads
  • transport infrastructure
  • industrial use
  • cruise ship terminal
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