The pie chart illustrates the pivotal ground that negatively affects the productivity of agricultural land while the table shows information about the proportion of land degradation due to those effects categorized in three separate areas of the world within the 1990s period.

The pie chart illustrates the pivotal ground that negatively affects the productivity of agricultural land while the table shows information about the proportion of land degradation due to those effects categorized in three separate areas of the world within the 1990s period.
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The pie chart provides the total proportion of long-term consequences of land degradation which were over-grazing, deforestation, over-cultivation, and others in the year
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1990 in the three distinct types of areas in the world. Looking from an
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perspective, it is readily apparent that agricultural productivity was the highest number in the data compared to others
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as deforestation which was the second pattern, and over-cultivation.
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, other causes were the lowest percentage.
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the figure, the loss of fertility accounted for 35% of the graph which was the main result of soil erosion,
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, deforestation and over-cultivation
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showed similar trends in the chart just over one-quarter and exactly a third in the final year surveyed. As for remaining, others
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at a mere 7% which was the smallest number contrasted with socio-economic impacts.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • land degradation
  • soil erosion
  • deforestation
  • overgrazing
  • excessive use of chemical fertilizers
  • poor irrigation practices
  • drought
  • desertification
  • climate change
  • loss of fertility
  • comparative analysis
  • agricultural activities
  • biodiversity
  • food security
  • socio-economic impacts
  • remedial measures
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