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The table below gives information on what people in five different countries chose to do with their discretionary income in 2002.

The table below gives information on what people in five different countries chose to do with their discretionary income in 2002.
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The table illustrates the proportions of discretionary 
income
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 allocated to spending, saving, and investing in India, Finland, Pakistan, Vietnam, and
Morocc
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Morocco
 in 2002.  
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 the predominant sector of their discretionary
income
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 in each country was spending.In all five countries, discretionary 
income
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 is allocated to investment in the smallest proportion. Out of the five countries，people
chose
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 to spend with their discretionary
income
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 was noticeably higher  in Morocco,at 50%,and India, at 45%.The proportion of investing was
also
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 highest in Morocco,at 6.8%.
while
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 saving was significantly
higer
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higher
 in Finland,at 14.1%,than in any of
other
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the other
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 countries.  It can be seen that
Vietham
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Vietnam
 had the lowest
percentages
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percentage
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 of discretionary
income
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 for
investng
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investing
，
at3.1
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at 3.1
%，In terms of 
spendings
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spending
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 and savings, Vietnamese have the lowest proportion of discretionary 
income
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.
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