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The table below gives information on what people in five different countries chose to do with their discretionary income in 2002.

#information #people #five #countries #income
the chart below shows
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 people chose to do with their discretionary income in India,Finland,Vietnam,Pakistan and Morocco in 2002.
Overall
,
mostly
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most
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 people prefer spending their income
than
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 saving and
the
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investment occurs
the
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 least proportion in the three categories in the
five
 different
countries
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additions
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invest
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 was not quite as much as
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. it’s noticeable that the proportion of
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spending
 and investment of Morocco was the highest among the
five
countries
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 50% and 6.8%,respectively
.
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while
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the
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spending ,
india
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India
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 was the second largest ,was 45%.which is far more than Vietnam.
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 the percentage of
saving
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savings
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 in the6ir income,Finland was the top of the
five
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 which is 8.5%.
however
 Pakistan represents spend a significant lowest percentage of spending and
saving
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was
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24.6%,8.5%.
otherwise
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the saving
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saving
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savings
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 of Pakistan
was
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 nowhere near as high as India .the difference between
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 two
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 was about 1.6%.of the
five
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,Vietnam invested
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 which was 3.1%.which is almost half of Morocco.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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