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The graph below shows a typical American and a Japanese office. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows a typical American and a Japanese office. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate an American and a Japanese layout of working spaces.
Overall
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, it is obvious that there have significant
different
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 between those workplaces.
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 as
individual’s
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individual
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 desks and more optional rooms for workers inside the American
office
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.
However
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, in
Japan
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Japan,
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 they create
simple
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a simple
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 atmosphere for employees. The Japanese
office
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 has two main parts for employees which includes 6 desks for each part and one for the section manager. Meanwhile, in
the
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America each employee has
separate
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a separate
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 desk which provides privacy between workers, and two section managers are located in the northeast of
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office
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the office
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. Department
manager
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managers
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 in Japan
placed
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are placed
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 in the top middle of the area (
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in Infront
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Infront
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front
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 of the window),
while
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 in the USA it is in the bottom of
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office
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an office
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 behind the section managers. In terms of
American
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the American
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office
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, we can see other kinds of rooms including
printer
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a printer
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 copier, storage and two conference rooms. These
are creating
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create
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 a
convenience
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convenient
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 and suitable
office
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 for workers.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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