The line graph shows male and female gym membership over a thirty-year period. The vertical axis represents the number of members in units of 1000. The horizontal axis represents the period from 1980 to 2010
The graph provides information about the fluctuation of gym relationships
accord to
men and women during thirty years, so, from 1980 to 2010.
Verb problem
between
Overall
, men had the major number with 5000 members in 2005, however
, they had the worst fall in two times: first,
that happened between 1985 and 1995 when they lost around 55% (2200 members); second,
a dramatic decline of numbers with a considerable decrease in 90% during 2005 to 2010.
On the other hand
, women have marginally grown every 5 years with a number near 1000. Also
, they had two decreases but it was less with only 40% two times: from 1995 to 2000 and from 2005 to 2010.
In brief, men had a better rise but they lost a lot of members during a large period. By contrast
, women had a lower amount but a better variation, also
their declines were less with a shorter period. At the end
of 2010, both registered loss
in their gym membership.Fix the agreement mistake
losses
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