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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.
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The presented line graph compares the reading book
numbers
 between
men
 and
women
 at Burnaby Public Library in a four-year period starting from 2011. It is evident that the
figure
 for both genders read how many
books
 in public library.just remained steadily
increaed
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increased
 from 2011 to 2014,
while
 the reading
numbers
 of
women
 rose to a peak in 2013 and declined to
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 first place. In detail, males and females read 3000 and 5000
books
 respectively in 2011. The
numbers
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 of
book
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books
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 read by both sexes remained stable increasing in 2012, with
this
 year, for
women
, reading book
numbers
 increased by 3 thousand
books
 and 1 thousand for
men
.
Women
 had exactly twice as many
books
 as the
figure
 for
men
. It is noteworthy that the reading number for
men
 and
women
 matched
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10,000 in 2013, which is the biggest number for
women
. After 2013, the
figure
 for
men
 overtook
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Women
.
Additionally
, the number of
men
further
 surged to
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14
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 thousand
books
 in 2014, but noticeably
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there was
a
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 obvious decrease in
regarding
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the
figure
 for
women
, as well
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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, men, women, figure, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • library
  • gender
  • reading habits
  • compare
  • significantly
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • consistent
  • fluctuate
  • period
  • summarise
  • graph
  • public library
  • books read
  • Burnaby Public Library
  • 2011 to 2014
  • male
  • female
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