The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates data about the
number
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of
opening
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openings
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and
closures
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of shops in one country over an eight-year period between 2011 to 2018. In general, what stands out from the graph is that
,
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there
were
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a downtrend in both numbers. Another
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interesting
intresting
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interesting
fact is that
,
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in 2011 the
number
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of openings
were
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was
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greater than
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closures
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the closures
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,
while
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in 2018 the
number
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of
closures
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were
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greater than openings. Looking at the details, as regards the numbers for openings, the
figure
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started at over 8000 and halved in the first period to reach 4000. In the next two
years
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there
were
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an upward trend in the
figure
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and reached about 6000,
then
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in 2016, the
number
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decreased to 4000 and remained the same for
next
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the next
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two
years
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.
Next,
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the
figure
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fall
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by 1000 to reach 3000 in 2018.
By contrast
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, the
number
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for
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of
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closures
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started at above 6000, there were some fluctuations in
first
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the first
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three
years
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.
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, the
figure
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plunged in 2015 and
fall
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fell
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to under 1000.
Following
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this
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number
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jumped in 2016 to reach almost 5000 and remained the same in
next
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the next
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two
years
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, closures, figure, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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