Human activities have negative effects on the plant and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this question. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is obvious that nowadays, people all around the world have
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role
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and
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natural
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environment and animals’ habitats.
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some people believe that it is
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to control
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problem, others think with some positive steps
this
trend will be controlled. I believe it is possible to protect our
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by getting help from
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and
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to be greener. On the one hand,
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changed the world
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doing
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of activities to provide a suitable atmosphere for
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.
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, in developed countries
due to
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many of the jungles were destroyed and it caused to unreliable
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on
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.
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, these kinds of attitudes are demolished
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habitats too which is non-reversible.
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, as we can see some issues have been created like global warming or
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of endangered animals
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all around the world.
On the other hand
, all individuals and
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can start doing some possible ways to
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environmental issues and protect our
plant
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planet
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. In that case, governments
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play
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role.
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they can provide some new rules to limit people and factories to become eco-friendly.
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they can get fairs from hunters or organs when they
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illegal activities.
Furthermore
, individuals can be
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greener,
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using more public
transportations
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transportation
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for controlling
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air
pollutions
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. In conclusion, as it was mentioned before some serious problems that happened before can not be solved,
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we can use some methods to control and protect to save animals and our lives.
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