Human activities have negative effects on the plant and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this question. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is obvious that nowadays, people all around the world have
significant
role Add an article
a significant
to damage
and Change preposition
in damaging
destroy
Wrong verb form
destroying
natural
environment and animals’ habitats. Add an article
the natural
While
,
some people believe that it is Remove the comma
apply
late
to control Rephrase
too late
this
problem, others think with some positive steps this
trend will be controlled. I believe it is possible to protect our plant
by getting help from Correct your spelling
planet
government
and Add an article
the government
try
to be greener.
On the one hand, Wrong verb form
trying
human
Fix the agreement mistake
humans
has
always Correct subject-verb agreement
have
been
changed the world Unnecessary verb
apply
with
doing Change preposition
by
lot
of activities to provide a suitable atmosphere for Change the article
a lot
himself
. Correct pronoun usage
themselves
For example
, in developed countries due to
manufacturing’s
many of the jungles were destroyed and it caused to unreliable Change noun form
manufacturing
affect
on Replace the word
effect
earth
. Capitalize word
Earth
In addition
, these kinds of attitudes are demolished animals
habitats too which is non-reversible. Change noun form
animals'
animal's
For instance
, as we can see some issues have been created like global warming or extinction
of endangered animals Correct article usage
the extinction
in
all around the world.
Change preposition
apply
On the other hand
, all individuals and government
can start doing some possible ways to Fix the agreement mistake
governments
restraint
environmental issues and protect our Replace the word
restrain
plant
. In that case, governments Correct your spelling
planet
are
play Unnecessary verb
apply
significant
role. Add an article
a significant
For
example
they can provide some new rules to limit people and factories to become eco-friendly. Add a comma
example,
Also
they can get fairs from hunters or organs when they Add a comma
Also,
did
illegal activities. Wrong verb form
do
Furthermore
, individuals can be more
greener, Change the word
apply
like
using more public Change preposition
by
transportations
Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
for controlling
air Change preposition
to control
pollutions
.
In conclusion, as it was mentioned before some serious problems that happened before can not be solved, Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
however
we can use some methods to control and protect to save animals and our lives.Add a comma
however,
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coherence cohesion
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