You want to start your own small business. Write a letter to a bank requesting information about obtaining a business loan to finance your new company. In your letter, include the following information: 1) what kind of business you want to start 2) how much money you need 3)the length of time over which you would expect to repay the money. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses

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Dear Sir, I hope

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letter finds you well. I am writing

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letter in context to avail a business loan from your bank. I am a professional dentist and I want to start a clinic, where I will be doing all kinds of dental procedures. I graduated in 2014 and ever since after

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I have been working in a private hospital as a junior dentist, in order to, gain practical experience. There are a few things, which I need to start my business.

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, a commercial space on rent.

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, dental equipment

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as Dental

chair

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X-Ray

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Machine

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, Air

compressor

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etc and

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, dental materials.

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, I am looking for a loan amount

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Seven Lacs, because I want to buy standardised

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only. I have talked with a few clinicians and

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majority

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of them, it takes around three to four years to establish a clinic.

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, keeping that in mind it would be great

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loan

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tenure is 5 Years and I will be paying

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basis. I hope you

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do best in your limits to

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my needs. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.

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Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to enhance clarity. The paragraph about the business details could bring in specific costs for transparency.

Greeting and Closing

Consider using a formal salutation and complementary close for improved business letter etiquette.

Task Response

The letter addresses all the required points: type of business, amount needed, and repayment plan.

Suitability of Writing Tone

The writing tone is polite and appropriately formal for a business letter.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

198 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

business loan
finance
capital
entrepreneur
startup
investment
repayment period
repayment schedule
principal amount
interest rate
financial assistance
business plan
profit potential
market analysis
industry opportunities

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