the line graph shows the changes in share price of Outokupu companies in euros between 2006 and 2020.

the line graph shows the changes in share price of Outokupu companies in euros between 2006 and 2020.
The chart provides information about
proportion
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the proportion
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of international students
graduated
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who graduated
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in Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.
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, we can see
decline
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a decline
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rate from New
brunswich
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to Ontario
except
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BC where in 2006 observed
high
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rate,
also
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a trace
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trace
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increase
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the increase
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of
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in
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the
amount
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of students in all provinces by 2006. Three states NB, BS,
QB
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and QB
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were leaders with more than 5% in 2001 and
first
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the first
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two among them almost doubled
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the persentage
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persentage
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percentage
of inter.students in 2006. By 2006, only BC had increased
number
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the number
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of inter.graduates more than two times.
Monitoba
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Manitoba
and NFL and Ontario had equal rates. Alberta and Quebec had
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a slightly
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slightly
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increase in percentage.
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