The table below shows the percentage of men and women employed in four different types of industries in one twon in 1990, 2000, and 2010.

The table below shows the percentage of men and women employed in four different types of industries in one twon in 1990, 2000, and 2010.
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The table compares the four different types of industries in one town
men
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and
women
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employed in percentage in 1990,2000,2010.
Overall
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, four industries experienced different trends in twenty years
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men
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worked in shops and manufacturing the most
while
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women
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worked in health and tourism. As the table shows, 13% of the
men
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worked in shops in 1990 and it didn’t change until 2010 and if we move to
women
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7% of them worked in shops in 1990, 8% in 2000 and in 2010 9% of them employed. When we moved to
health
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industry
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7% of the
male
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males
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were employed in 1990 and 200 too but it went up to 9% in 2010 and in 1990 9% of the
female
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females
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were employed in the health
industry
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11% in 2000, 15% in 2010. The manufacturing
industry
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included almost
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30% in 1990 but suddenly it declined to 15% in 2000 and it declined to 10% in 2010. Tourism
included
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13% of
men
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in 1990 and in 2000 it was 10% and in 2010 too, but
female
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females
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were much more than
men
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in the tourism
industry
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it was 23% in 1990 and 25% in 200 and in 2010 27% of the
women
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employed.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, industry with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
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