The graph below shows the percentage of GDP government spending on health, education and road & railways from 2000 to 2025 in a particular country.

The line graph above demonstrates the percentage of gross domestic product
government
expenditure on
health
, education,
street
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streets
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and railways between the years 2000 and 2025 in a certain country.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
government
is consistently focused on
health
.
However
,
health
also
street
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streets
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and railways are
otherwise
.
Firstly
, in 2000, the
government
spent as much as 4 per
cent
on
health
.
Then
, the number steadily
increase
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increases
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overtime
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over time
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. In 2010, the percentage reached more than 5 per
cent
. After that, in 2015, the percentage was 6 per
cent
, which was slightly
high
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higher
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than
previous
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the previous
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number. In 2025, the prediction shows the
government
will spend PDB on
health
around 7 per
cent
. At
first,
the
government
expended on
road
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roads
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and railroad as same as on
health
, in 2000.
Nevertheless
, the expenditure remained
sink
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in 2005.
Subsequently
, in 2015, the number rose
until
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to
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4.8 per
cent
. Later, significantly decreased
in
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apply
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the projection to below 4 per
cent
.
On the other hand
, education had
GDP
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a GDP
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was about 5 per
cent
. Afterwards, constantly climbed to 7 per
cent
.
Thereafter
, sharply
dip
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dipped
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to 4 per
cent
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words government, health, cent with synonyms.
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