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Reading has a positive effect on people. Do you agree or disagree? opinion essay giving reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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For many
people
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 in today's world, reading takes a huge part of their daily lives. In the past, there wasn't
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 like
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;
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individual’s
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 still read yet. In my opinion, reading has a positive effect on
people
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 because it gives the reader
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knowledge and improves mental well-being.
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 with, reading has a positive impact on
people
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 because it gives the knowledge for the reader.
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the individuals who
reads
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 a lot that’s reflect positively on their
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 with others.
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, recent research by the University of Harvard has shown that 55% of
people
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 who follow the
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 roles are avid readers. In brief, having knowledge is one
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benefits
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from
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 reading.
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, reading is
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 good because it enhances mental well-being.
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, reading a biography of
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 character
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 might teach you about dealing with stress.
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,
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last
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 study by (PSU) has shown
people
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 who
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read
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 a lot have better mental
health
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 than their peers after age 60. In short,
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people
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 mental
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 by reading. In conclusion, I believe that reading is
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 for individuals because it offers information and
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 psychological
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. Reading can make
people
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 better and think more clearly, and it
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 reduces stress and improves mental
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. To live better, we should try to make reading a part of our daily lives.
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task achievement
Make sure to provide more specific and varied examples to support your main points. This will strengthen your arguments and demonstrate a thorough understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your ideas logically flow and are presented in a clear and concise manner. Consider expanding on each point to fully develop your arguments.
task response
Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and sentence structure to enhance clarity and comprehension.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a clear introduction that sets the stage for the argument, as well as a thoughtful conclusion that summarizes the main points.
task achievement
You've articulated a relevant and clear thesis, especially highlighting how reading impacts knowledge and mental well-being.
coherence cohesion
The transitions between paragraphs are generally smooth, helping to guide the reader through your argument.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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