You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: A lot of money is spent nowadays searching for oil. As the world's oil resources will eventually run out, it would be more logical to spend some of this money on developing new sources of power, such as wind and solar. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.
In the modern epoch, many organisations are spending a lot of money to find
oil
reserves. Some people think that oil
will soon run out , so it is wise to spend this
capital on other sources
such
as wind and solar. This
essay will argue why it is necessary to spend the resources on the sources
of power in the impending paragraphs.
After analyzing the statement and explaining further
, the first and foremost reason behind is that oil
is the backbone of each and every industry. For example
, every petrochemical products
Fix the agreement mistake
product
such
as Plastic, HDPE, and LDPE manufactured from oil
. Crude is converted to different products through a series of chemical processes. Furthermore
, Fossil fuel is still a large source for producing electricity. However
, it is predicted that fossil fuels will be
soon run out and it will cost more capital to find crude reserves.
Probing ahead, Unnecessary verb
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since
few decades, environmental issues Change preposition
in
became
a big concern as it is Wrong verb form
have become
a
main reason for Correct article usage
the
a
global warming. Remove the article
apply
In addition
, oil
is the main contributor. So, people wants
to look for alternative options Change the verb form
want
such
as renewable energy sources
because they do not cause any harm to environment
. Add an article
the environment
Hence
, it is wise to invest in these options. For instance
, nowadays cars run on electric batteries which causes less pollution. This
point alone proves that
why renewable energy is important.
Correct word choice
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To conclude
, taking everything mentioned into the
account, I agree with the individuals who want to invest their Correct article usage
apply
fund
Fix the agreement mistake
funds
on
Change preposition
in
the
renewable power. These Correct article usage
apply
sources
produce zero carbon which will help to reduce carbon emissions and make world
a better place.Add an article
the world
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task achievement
The introduction provides a clear stance, but it could be more explicitly stated whether you agree or disagree with the statement. This could be achieved by concisely summarizing the main argument in one sentence.
task achievement
While the essay effectively addresses the task, including more detailed examples could strengthen the argument. You may consider providing statistics or case studies regarding renewable energy successes.
coherence cohesion
The essay maintains a logical and clear structure. However, the transitions between the points could be improved to ensure seamless coherence. Use more linking words or phrases to enhance flow.
coherence cohesion
In the paragraph discussing environmental issues, further elaboration on how investing in renewables counters global warming could provide a stronger argument. Linking back to the main point in conclusions of paragraphs would also help.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main arguments and clearly restates the opinion, emphasizing the need for investing in renewable sources.
task achievement
You provided a good comparison between fossil fuels and renewable energy, explaining the benefits of the latter.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
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