These days, many people are copying famous celebrities from TV and magazines. Why is this happening? Do you think it is a good idea to copy celebrities?
In recent times, famous and successful superstars from TV and magazines are being copied by
large
number of people. Change the article
a large
the large
Audiences
desire to be like their ideals, and to show their love towards their favourite celebrities are the main reason behind Change noun form
Audiences'
Audience's
this
trend. I believe it is not a good idea to copy these actors because their lifestyle is different than commoners and they put on acts on the screen to get paid.
To begin
with, imitating celebrities became
a trend among the youth of today. Not only Wrong verb form
has become
people
want to express their love to these celebrities, but they want to experience their Add a missing verb
do people
laxurious
lifestyle. Viewers these days are following every move of the influencers through social media and in order to show their support and love they buy unwanted stuff and services promoted by them. Correct your spelling
luxurious
For example
, In 20th
century, baggy pants Correct article usage
the 20th
become
Wrong verb form
became
essential
piece of clothing in every Add an article
an essential
teenagers
wardrobe who follows street style fashion icons.
I reckon following and replicating every move of a celebrity is not significant and can have damaging effects on someone's mental and physical health. Change to a genitive case
teenager's
That is
to say, actors are being paid to do their jobs by promoting and advertising dangerous product
, Fix the agreement mistake
products
such
as tobacco and nicotine, which can lead to cancer. Following the need to buy these Products
can cause severe damage to someone's health. Fix capitalization
products
Furthermore
, copying not only destroy
your budgetCorrect subject-verb agreement
destroys
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
destroyed
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destroys
their
your Correct pronoun usage
apply
among
peers.
In conclusion, Change preposition
apply
although
it is considerably nice being a diehard fan of celebrity and coping their
lifestyle to some extent, pretending and imposing to be one can cause serious damage to someone's entire personality.Change preposition
with their
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