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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

#information #tourists #holiday #resort #australia #summarise #features #comparisons
The pie chart shows data about tourists in Australia and their origins.
Also
, the table provides information about what characters each
groups
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group
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 have when they stay at a special holiday resort.
It is clear that
 the biggest
popluation
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population
 who visit the facility are from Asia, followed by Europe, the US and
other
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others
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. The chart compares their average length of stay,
most
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the most
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popluar accomodation
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popular accommodation
, and
also
main
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the main
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 activity they usually do. To be precise, the proportion of Asians who stay at the resort is 37%.
Also
, we can see that Europeans are the second most visited tourists, comprising 35%.
On the other hand
, Americans account for 18% and the other group amounts to only 10%. Moving on to the table chart, European visitors stay for over 2 weeks on average,
whereas
 Asian people stay for 7 days, which is the shortest length across all the groups. Interestingly, citizens from Asia and the USA prefer staying at a hotel and they both
enjoyed
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enjoy
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 sightseeing. But, the other two groups either
sleep
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slept
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at
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in
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 caravans or
go
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went
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 camping and they
enjoyed
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enjoy
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 activities near the ocean
such
 as surfing, sunbathing or swimming.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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