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The line graph below shows the number of students enrolled in four different courses at a university from 2017 to 2022. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#line #students #four #courses #university #information #features #comparisons
The provided line graph and bar graph illustrate the data about
number
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a number
the number
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 of
males
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male
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 and
females
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female
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students
 who enrolled in six subjects in university between 2017 and 2022.
Overall
,
highest
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the highest
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 number of
students
 selected social sciences,
whereas
least
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the least
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student
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students
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preffered
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preferred
agriculture
. The majority of male
students
enroled
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enrolled
 in Engineering,
science
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Science
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 and Math than
female
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females
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.
In contrast
, female
student
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students
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 selected social
science
,
Heath
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health
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 and Humanities over
males
. Both
males
 and females selected
agriculture
 equally. The
students
 who
prefered
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preferred
 social
science
was
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were
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 the most popular subject and 7000
students
enroled
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enrolled
 in
this
 subject
while
 just below 1000 people
prefered
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preferred
agriculture
. The number of male
students
 who selected social
science
 was 4000 and it was higher than
female
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the female
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preferance
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preference
in
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for
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this
 subject.
Further
,
males
 were less
interest
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interested
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 in health and humanities but
comparitive
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comparative
 interest in
science
 and Math which were around 1000.
On the other hand
, the females, have more interest in health and humanities which showed
the
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a
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 value of nearly 1500 but less in
agriculture
 (less than 1000).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, students, agriculture, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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