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Nowadays there is a rapid increase of rubbish amounts all arounf the world . What are the causes and solutions of this problem .

#rubbish #amounts #arounf #world
while
 we live in a smart
world
 in the technology development era, there are much of
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plastic
 pollution around the
world
. In my opinion ,
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 think there
is
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 a lot of solutions
for
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this
world-wide
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 problem. One of
causes
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 is the non-recyclable
plastic
 product which
it
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is considered
a
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non-friendly for
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nature. There is
a
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research in 2009 established by the
university
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 of MIT illustrated the amount of
the
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non-recyclable
plastic
 garbage produced in the USA. the result was 244 tons of the harmful
plastic type
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 just in the year 2009, which
considered
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 a
huge
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 significant number. They
discoverd
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discovered
 that the non-recyclable
plastic
 killed a lot of sea animals and spread diseases around the earth.
On the other hand
, the type of
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plastic
 can be changed if the
goverments
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governments
government
 around the
world
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 and
applyed
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 the recyclable
plastic
 rule in their chemical factors.
Consequently
 ,The harmful
plastic
 production will significantly decrease and
the
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nature will be
exremely
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extremely
inhanced
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enhanced
as a result
.
To sum up
 ,
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plastic
 pollution is a dangerous problem in the
world
 and can
effect
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 a wide range
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area
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 of the planet and
kills
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 animals. The production can be restricted to solve that problem
otherwise
 the negative impact will remain and increase.
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introduction
Start your essay with a five-sentence paragraph that lays out the topic of the essay and summarizes your main points.
examples
Use specific examples and statistics to back up the claims in your writing.
task response
Address possible solutions like the promotion of reusable materials or stricter regulations on plastic production.
conclusion
The conclusion clearly restates the importance of the issue and the necessity of a solution.
content use
The essay contains a paragraph that presents a real-world investigation related to the topic.
organization
There is a logical sequence of beginning with the cause and then presenting a solution.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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