Nowadays more mothers go out to work while fathers stay at home and look after the children. What do you think are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development in your opinion?
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my opinion, it Change the preposition
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different
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work
.
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mother
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the father
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families
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my Change the preposition
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opinion
it Add a comma
opinion,
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depends
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on
societies
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society
family
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a family
father
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the father
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mother
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the father
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family. Change preposition
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