Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

It
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true
that in the modern
world
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some
animals
start to enter the phase
to
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be
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extinct
due to
some actions that happen to
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,
such
as hunting for fun only.
While
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on
animals
for
food
,
however
, now humans have various resources for
food
like
vegetebals
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vegetables
vegetable
. There are some solutions that can be taken to save these
animals
. The old
concipte
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concrete
concept
concepts
for hunting is to survive.
However
, now it become a way for
entertaitment
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entertainment
and
prectice
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practice
practise
some
hoppies
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hippies
. The reasons are
globle
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global
worming
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,
uncvilized
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uncivilized
uncivilised
actions, and
crule
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cruel
rule
animals
.
Firstly
,
globle
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global
worming
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plays a significant role that
effect
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affect
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wild
animals
since that
hight
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high
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tempurature
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temperature
level kills these
animals
.
Secondly
,
uncvilized
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uncivilized
uncivilised
actions
such
as people who hunt to
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entertain
entrain
themsleves
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themselves
and spend a good time with friends,
this
type of
behaivior
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behaviour
is what put these
animals
in
dangure
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danger
.
Finally
,
crule
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cruel
animals
that depend on other creatures as
food
,
is
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a
reasone
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reason
for the loss of
animals
.
For example
, lions usually eat
deers
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as a
favorite
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food
. To save
thses
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these
animals
, there are some solutions that need to be taken.
Forceing
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Forcing
criminls
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criminals
criminal
to pay a fine,
that is
amount
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of 2000
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Dollars
.
This
will reduce
the
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wild hunting which in return will save the
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extinct.
For example
, in Saudi Arabia, hunting
deers
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deer
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is a crime that will charge about 3000
dollers
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dollars
in
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addition
to going to jail. In
concluion
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conclusion
, it is correct that some
animals
are about to be extinct
due to
some
uncivilzed
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uncivilized
hunting. I believe that the good way to stop it is to pay fines that cost a lot.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • species extinction
  • endangered animals
  • biodiversity
  • habitat loss
  • deforestation
  • urbanization
  • poaching
  • illegal wildlife trade
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • conservation efforts
  • legislation
  • enforcement
  • human overpopulation
  • sustainable development
  • responsible consumption
  • education
  • awareness programs
  • protected areas
  • wildlife reserves
  • international cooperation
  • collaboration
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