Having babies later can have more negative than positive effects on young adults? What is pros and cons about having babies laterand how do you think?

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people believe, that having
babies
later could be positive for young adults ,
while
others believe that could be a negative choice. In
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I will be discussing the positives and negatives sides of having
babies
later on young adults, and say what I think about the pros and cons. Planning to have children can differ from person to person, and for some people having
babies
sometimes can happen unexpectedly. In a complex world, with loads of
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people are never sure when is the
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time
to
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a children
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. The fact is, if you are waiting for the right
time
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never be able to find that,
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, life always will have something that we need to sort out. Positivily thinking , having
babies
later can provide to the couple to focus on their studies or
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careers
career
goals,
besides
that , children can demand a lot of attention
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the parents,
thus
, may one of the parents have to abdicate of their work to be a parent. Can allow the couples to enjoy each other more, travelling and having a better join of the
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youngest
married moments in life
further
to
this
, having
babies
could
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the couple's freedom.
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, the
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side can bring
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the parents a certain kind of risk
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the
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pregnancy
time
,
moreover
,
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better for
womans
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women
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to have
babies
young in order to the good eggs. With the advancement of science ,
womans
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women
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can freeze
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eggs,
nonetheless
, it can be
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expensive
expansive
and
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exousted
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exhausted
existed
process. Many
womans
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women
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wait to be
mother
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later, and
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,
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the
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infertilit
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infertility
problems. I can say
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my own experience. I
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the dream of being a mother for later,
hence
, I was surprised by an
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unexpected
early
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menopause
. In my opinion, the option of having
babies
later will depend
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the priorities and choices of the couple,
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important to have a planing and think about all the possibilities in order to have
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memories and
time
possible. And having in mind how important is your choice of
puting
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putting
a human in the world.
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