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The line graph shows the Population in the state of Oregon by county. Three counties that incresed in population between 1940 and 2000, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington had shown the different increasing.

The line graph shows the Population in the state of Oregon by county. Three counties that incresed in population between 1940 and 2000, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington had shown the different increasing.
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The graph demonstrates three various counties of the Oregon state's increasing population
such
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 as
Columbia
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, Xamhill and Washington during 1940 and 2000.
Overall
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, it is obvious that Washington was the dominant county with the highest number of citizens between those years, but
on the other hand
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,
Columbia
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 showed a downward all the time with a slight
rising
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.
Furthermore
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, Xamhill followed
Columbia
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 with little differences. To look at details, in 1940 Washington had 75
thousand
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 population which hit its highest point and over the years the citizens of
this
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 town reached 240
thousand
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.
Moreover
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,
although
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Columbia
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 started with only 20
thousand
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 it increased its pupils by 80
thousand
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.
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, Yamhill followed similar patterns as
Columbia
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,
for example
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, the citizens of Xamhill were 30
thousand
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 in 1940, but it was risen by 90
thousand
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 in 2000.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words columbia, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demographics
  • Census
  • Migration
  • Infrastructural development
  • Economic impact
  • Urbanization
  • Rural to urban shift
  • Growth rate
  • Satellite cities
  • Migration patterns
  • Local economy
  • Population density
  • Service provision
  • Housing market
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Population spike
  • Sustainable growth
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