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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates different orientations of Anthropology students after graduating from a university,
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 the table presents a detailed overview of the income they can earn after five years of employment.
Overall
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, the subject of anthropology offers promising job opportunities because the majority of
graduates
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 have full-time employment.
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, the
graduates
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 working in the government sector for over 5 years can earn the highest salaries.
According to
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 the pie chart, full-time employment is the most common choice among students after graduation, accounting for 52%,
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 15% opt for part-time jobs. Meanwhile, 5% of
graduates
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 choose to combine studying and working, compared to 8% who decide to study full-time.
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, 12% of
graduates
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 are unemployed, and 8% have no data available. Concerning the data table, working in the government sector offers the highest income, with 50% of
graduates
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 earning over $100,000, compared to 40% of those working as freelance consultants.
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, in private enterprises, the percentage of people earning more than $100,000 only reaches 30%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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