The diagram below shows how instant noodies are manufactured.
THE FLOWCHART SHOWS THE PROCESS OF MAKING INSTANT
NOODLES
.
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OVERALL
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IT IS CLEAR THAT
MANUFACTURING INSTANT Linking Words
NOODLES
CONSIST OF 8 VARIOUS STAGES, STARTING FROM STORAGE SILOS AND ENDING WITH LABELLING OF PRODUCTS.
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FIRSTLY
, SILOS FILLED WITH FLOUR AND KEPT Linking Words
IT
IN THE POCKETS TRANSFER BY TRUCKS INTO MIXERS. WATER AND OIL Correct pronoun usage
apply
ADDED
TO IT, SO Add a missing verb
WERE ADDED
MIXTURE
TURNED INTO DOUGH SHEETS. THROUGH ROLLERS IT TURNED INTO DOUGH STRIPS. THE NEXT STEP Correct article usage
THE MIXTURE
INVOLVING
NOODLE DISCS, Replace the word
INVOLVED
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THEN
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THE
NOODLES
WERE COOKED IN OIL, Use synonyms
AS WELL AS
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DRYING
. ALL DRYING Wrong verb form
DRIED
NOODLES
WERE PUT INTO THE CUPS BY ADDING VEGETABLES AND SPICES, Use synonyms
THEN
ALL Linking Words
NOODLES
WERE LABELLED AND PUT LOGOS.Use synonyms
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