The diagram below shows how instant noodies are manufactured.

The diagram below shows how instant noodies are manufactured.
THE FLOWCHART SHOWS THE PROCESS OF MAKING INSTANT
NOODLES
.
OVERALL
,
IT IS CLEAR THAT
MANUFACTURING INSTANT
NOODLES
CONSIST OF 8 VARIOUS STAGES, STARTING FROM STORAGE SILOS AND ENDING WITH LABELLING OF PRODUCTS.
FIRSTLY
, SILOS FILLED WITH FLOUR AND KEPT
IT
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IN THE POCKETS TRANSFER BY TRUCKS INTO MIXERS. WATER AND OIL
ADDED
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TO IT, SO
MIXTURE
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THE MIXTURE
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TURNED INTO DOUGH SHEETS. THROUGH ROLLERS IT TURNED INTO DOUGH STRIPS. THE NEXT STEP
INVOLVING
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NOODLE DISCS,
THEN
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THE
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NOODLES
WERE COOKED IN OIL,
AS WELL AS
DRYING
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. ALL DRYING
NOODLES
WERE PUT INTO THE CUPS BY ADDING VEGETABLES AND SPICES,
THEN
ALL
NOODLES
WERE LABELLED AND PUT LOGOS.
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