You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
The issue of students learning to be a better guardian
from
schools is an ongoing debate.Some humans Change preposition
in
beleive
Correct your spelling
believe
this
is a good plan.It is my firm opinion that students should not learn this
from school.
In this
new generation developing a good parenting skill is an important aspect of everyone's life.A good
Correct the article-noun agreement
A good parent
Good parents
parents
should exibhit
skills like patience and empathy.They should Correct your spelling
exhibit
also
improve their kindness and ability to understand and being
supportive.Children and adults these days have more violent behaviour than past.If they don't get what they are asking for they will start to show bad behaviours in order to get what they want.Most Change the verb form
be
parents
in this
case shout against their child
instead
of being calm and making them understand why they cannot have it.
On the other hand
,there some
teenagers who are not getting enough care and attention from their Add a missing verb
are some
parents
which lead
them to depression or sometimes even drug Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
addict
.Replace the word
addiction
For example
, a child
is sad about something and cannot share it with parents
because they are not available.This
sadness will not go away and keep getting worse by
time.In order to escape from the sorrow they start using drugs which will give them Change preposition
over
an
euphoric effect and make them forget about the present Change the article
a
whereas
others overthink the fact that they don't have anybody to listen which after months/years might lead to depression.
I don't think being a good paret
in the future should be taught in school as these students will act as they study how to manage certain situations.I Correct your spelling
parent
part
stronlgy beleive
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strongly believe
a
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parents
a parent
parents
should be able to connect to the child
emotionaly
and act Correct your spelling
emotionally
according to
it which will create an understanding and strong bond between parent and child
.
To conclude
,even though some people claim that children should study good parenting skill
at school,it is my opinion that they should learn these skills by getting exposed to Fix the agreement mistake
skills
such
situations.Submitted by diyamariyambiju123 on
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure clarity by dividing your ideas into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct point to make it easier for readers to follow your argument.
Task Achievement
Provide more examples and evidence to support your points, this will make your arguments more convincing and comprehensive.
General Writing
Check for grammatical mistakes and improve sentence variety to enhance readability and professionalism.
Task Achievement
You provided a structured argument by taking a clear stance against teaching parenting in schools.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay ends with a conclusion that summarizes your stance and reiterates your viewpoint.
Task Achievement
You effectively addressed multiple aspects of parenting skills and student behavior.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example
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