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The pie charts below show the global emissions in 1990 and 2011 in different parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#show #emissions #parts #world #information #features #comparisons
The provided
two
 pie charts illustrate the data about the percentages of British
students
 who
speaks
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forein
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foreign
languages
in addition
 to English at the university in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, the majority of
students
 speak
spanish
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Spanish
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,
while
least
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the least
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speak
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spoken
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languages
 were German and
two
 other
languages
 in both years. In 2000, the highest number of
students
 used Spanish which was 30%
whereas
 the trend
was
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rose
about
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 5% in 2010.
In contrast
, the
tendancy
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tendency
 of people who prefer
French
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the French
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 language has declined from 15% to 10%
in
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between
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 2000 and 2010. As same
as
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apply
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the
students
 who used no other
langauage
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language
 declined from 20% to 10% but the
preferance
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preference
 for another language increased from 15% to 20% in 2000 and 2010. In 2010, there were four categories of
lanuage
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language
 styles
had
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that had
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 less
preferance
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preference
 which were,
two
 other
language
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languages
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, German, French and English
only
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apply
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. The usage
percentages
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percentage
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 of these four categories was 10% in 2010. The student's choice has not changed for German and
two
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the two
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languages
 which show 10% use in both years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, students, languages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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