The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The diagram describes where Anthropology graduates from one educational institution found
job
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after their undergraduate degree course.
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, the table indicates the earnings of the anthropologists in
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after five years. Studying the chart in more detail it can be clearly seen that the majority of graduates (52 per
cent
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) were employed
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full time
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job
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jobs
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. The
least
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lowest
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proportion combined partial
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and postgraduate studies or postgraduate studies only (with 5 per
cent
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and 8 per
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respectively). Others had part-time
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(15 per
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) or did not find
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job (12 per
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). Looking at the table with indicated
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after 5 years'
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we can see that
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the
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largest
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for half of
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the persons
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(50 per
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) were earned in
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the governmental
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sector (more than 100,000 USD). The same earnings were observed in freelance consultants (40 per
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). 5 per
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of employees, working in
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the governmental
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field and as freelancers and 10 per
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of workers
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private companies had
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between 25,000 and 49,999 USD. In summary, the largest part of
Antropology
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Anthropology
graduates were able to find
a full-time
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full-time work
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work
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after finishing their studies and the highest
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after 5 years of
work
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had workforce from the governmental sector.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words work, cent, salaries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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