TASK 1: The table below shows the percentage of men and women employed in four different types of industries in one twon in 1990, 2000, and 2010.

TASK 1: The table below shows the percentage of men and women employed in four different types of industries in one twon in 1990, 2000, and 2010.
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The table provides data about women and men who worked in 4 different types of
industries
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in 1990, 2000, and 2010.
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, it can be seen that in 1990 the number of male employees in the manufacturing industry had the highest
percentage
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while
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women employees in the same industry showed the lowest
percentage
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in 2010
To begin
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with male workers in 1990 and 2000 had the same
percentage
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in the retail and health
industries
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. Since the manufacturing process, the number of employees decreased by 20% between 1990 and 2010
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tourism declined steadily by around 10% Regarding
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female workers in 4 different
industries
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had no big changes over the period of time.
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, the
percentage
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of health and shop
industries
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increased only by 2% between 1990 and 2010. Since the manufacturing industry dropped about 3%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words industries, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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