TASK 1: The table below shows the percentage of men and women employed in four different types of industries in one twon in 1990, 2000, and 2010.

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The table provides data about women and men who worked in 4 different types of

industries

in 1990, 2000, and 2010.

Overall

, it can be seen that in 1990 the number of male employees in the manufacturing industry had the highest

percentage

while

women employees in the same industry showed the lowest

percentage

in 2010

To begin

with male workers in 1990 and 2000 had the same

percentage

in the retail and health

industries

. Since the manufacturing process, the number of employees decreased by 20% between 1990 and 2010

while

tourism declined steadily by around 10% Regarding

Remove the preposition

apply

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female workers in 4 different

industries

had no big changes over the period of time.

For example

, the

percentage

of health and shop

industries

increased only by 2% between 1990 and 2010. Since the manufacturing industry dropped about 3%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words industries, percentage with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

137 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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TASK 1: The table below shows the percentage of men and women employed in four different types of industries in one twon in 1990, 2000, and 2010.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Write a letter to your friend who wants to visit your hometown. In your letter say • When is the best time to visit • Recommend someplace to stay • Invite her/him to your house

Some people believe that protecting the natural environment is important but many doesn't seem to be bothered to take actions. What is causing this? And what are the possible solutions to this problem?

A Australian friend recently sent you a present by post. You want to thank him/her. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -say how you felt when you received the present -describe what you like about it -explain how you will use the present

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some think schools should rewards students who have the best academic results, while others think it’s more important to reward students who achieve other types of success (such as sports, music, and good behaviour). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.