Write about the following topic: These days in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, the tendency of becoming a
teached
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teacher
is declining drastically
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various reasons
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in secondary teaching positions. In
this
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essay, I will discuss the possible reasons for
this
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issue and how to mitigate it.
Firstly
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, one of
main
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reason
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reasons
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why graduates less
interest
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to become
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a
teacher
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because
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the teaching
job
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is very
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stressfull
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stressful
. As an example, when the
teacher
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work
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with secondary school children they have more
resonsibility
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responsibility
to teach them
as well as
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look after them in the classroom.
This
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makes them more
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stressfull
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stressful
becasue
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because
more
responsibility
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means more stress. Having stress in the workplace has
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effect on their personal life and
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at
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the end, they quit the
job
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. So, most
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the
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people do not prefer to get that kind of pressure in their
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first
job
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. Another reason is that most teaching jobs have attached with less salaries
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to other occupations which have the same level of
responsibility
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or less.
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, it is
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human nature to select more beneficial jobs rather than more
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stressfull
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stressful
or responsible
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job
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jobs
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.
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, the government has more
responsibility
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to encourage individuals to start their
carrer
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careers
as
a
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teacher
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teachers
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because education is
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backbone of
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society. To make it realistic, the
goverment
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government
should offer high
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wages
wedges
and incentives for teachers.
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, the authorities must arrange special training programs for teachers who teach secondary students.
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, it is
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responsibility
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to treat
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teacher
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teachers
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as high respectable occupation because they are the main influencers
of
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student's
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students'
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livers
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lives
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. In conclusion,
while
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the teaching career is a
high
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resonsible
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responsible
and more
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stressfull
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stressful
job
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,
less
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lower
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salaries and
the
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apply
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respect for the
job
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make it harder to keep teachers in the
job
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field.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondary education
  • teaching profession
  • financial incentive
  • workload
  • behavioral issues
  • professional growth
  • career advancement
  • societal undervaluation
  • high-stakes testing
  • creativity
  • autonomy
  • competitive salaries
  • work-life balance
  • professional development
  • motivated
  • appreciation
  • teacher training programs
  • classroom management
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