What are the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The advantage of online shopping- you can spend a minimum amount of time
for
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choosing or buying something from websites.
For
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example-if,
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example-if
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you want to buy
a
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new
sneakers
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pair of sneakers
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for your friend but you
have
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not any time for
this
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, you can buy and you can order sneakers anywhere in the world, even
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your friend's house. It's a really good side of online shopping.
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there is
disadvantage
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a disadvantage
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to online shopping too The first
of
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problem shopping online you can't try on clothes and you can make
mistake
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when choosing a size and you will get clothes that are smaller or larger for you.
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nowadays a lot of people prefer shopping online. Despite the
disadvantage
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, many
of
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people
choose
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buy something from
online
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an online
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shop
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introduction conclusion present
Consider expanding your introduction to give context to the topic and clearly outline what will be discussed. Also, ensure a conclusion summarizes the key points made.
logical structure
Organize your ideas more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea with a clear topic sentence, supported by details and examples.
complete response
To fully achieve the task response, provide a more balanced discussion of both advantages and disadvantages. Expand on each point with more detailed examples and explanations.
relevant specific examples
You effectively mentioned a personal example, making the essay more relatable.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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