Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this How can this problem be overcome

Quite a number of people find balancing their
job
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jobs
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and other parts of their
lives
difficult.
This
essay will give reasons and solutions for
this
problem.
Firstly
, the major reason why people's
job
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jobs
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and
lives
are not balanced is that they live their
lives
any how
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anyhow
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. They do not plan how to live their
lives
. Because of
this
, their
lives
lack balance.
Further
, individuals live confused
lives
.
For example
, a student at a university
get
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gets
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a
job
and decides, without thinking twice about
this
,
tht
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that
she wants to work twelve hours in
this
job
. At
at
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the same time, she has classes daily and at the same time, she wants to be shopping always, visiting friends, going to church and doing all
things
.
At the end
of the day, she walks like a headless chicken, because she wants to do all these
things
,
hence
, her
life
lacks balance.
Secondly
, doing many
things
sometimes causes
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confusion
confussion
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confusion
and imbalance, Proper planning brings order and balance
in
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one
's
life
.
Also
prioritizing
things
in
life
is
one
of the best ways of solving problems. There are vital
things
that
one
needs to look at and
then
get rid of other
things
that can be time wasters and distractions.
In addition
,
elimination
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the elimination
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of these can be vital. The other necessary thing that
one
can introduce in their
life
is to do a
To do
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List for a day, week, month or year.
Furthermore
,
this
should be followed. Having a diary will help in
one
's planning. Reminders as well a greater reminder. In conclusion, many individuals encounter
imbalance
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an imbalance
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between their work and parts of their
lives
.
This
is because of not planning their
lives
and
also
doing many
things
at
one
goal. The solution to these issues
are
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that people need to plan their
lives
properly,
decide
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and decide
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on attending to major and necessary
things
in
life
. Having diaries, setting reminders and doing a
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