Some people believe that lessons on becoming a good parent should be included in school curriculum. Others think that it is not essential for students. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals are of the view that educating
people
on being a good mother or father should be part of the learning curriculum
while
others believe that
this
is not vital.
This
essay will discuss both views. My opinion seconds
this
statement. On the one hand, children must be taught
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all things in life including educating them on motherhood and
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fatherhood
in schools.
Further
,
this
is a necessity in life.
Furthermore
, we have many children who are orphans and have no one to tell them about parenthood. The statistics of orphans from The New Times Newspaper in America
states
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that
are
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3 out of 5 know nothing about parenthood. The only best place where they can get
such
teachings are schools,
hence
it is necessary for their education to have a curriculum that will give them
such
a teaching.
On the other hand
, some
people
think that it is unnecessary to educate scholars on being a mother or a father.
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Additionally
, they
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people
can be taught all these things in their homes, churches, communities and different clubs.
In addition
, some say Mr. Google will educate them as well and they can
also
read different books with
such
information.
For example
, cultural
people
or the elderly can teach about
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parenthood
. Students should
also
observe how the elderly
people
behave and live and
then
they can
immitate
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imitate
them. In conclusion, being a mother or father, is a belief that others say, should be added
in
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the school curriculum
while
other
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others
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are in disagreement with
this
point because they say, it is unnecessary as
people
can google any
and
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this
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information from Mr. Google. Others say,
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that immitating
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immitating
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imitating
the elderly and getting information about
this
from them is one
the
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things
people
shoud
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should
use to learn about parenthood.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Curriculum
  • Parenting education
  • Child development
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Practical life skills
  • Financial management
  • Conflict resolution
  • Real-life experience
  • Theoretical lessons
  • Cultural practice
  • Universal lessons
  • Social structures
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