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Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do anything. Others believe that men and women are not equal and therefore are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?

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In today's fast-paced world, gender equality plays a pivotal role in every aspect of life. Many folks say that males and females are the same
while
 some argue they are not. I firmly believe that
men
 are different from
women
 physically, mentally and emotionally. To embark on, the female counterparts lack the physical strength and ability to do strenuous work. They have soft bodies with soft muscles which makes it difficult for them to lift heavy weights and do intense work.
For instance
, the construction workers are mostly males because of the amount of work which needs too much physical strength.
That is
 one of the reasons females are not equal to
men
 physically. Biological differences significantly impact capabilities.
For instance
, physical strength and endurance are crucial in combat roles, where
men
 generally excel. In India, traditional family structures often rely on
men
 as primary breadwinners,
while
women
 focus on childcare. Acknowledging these differences doesn't imply inferiority but recognizes complementary strengths. Societal expectations
also
 influence suitability.
Women
 often prioritize nurturing and emotional support, essential in roles like teaching and healthcare. India's traditional joint family system benefits from
women
's caregiving skills. By embracing these differences, we promote harmony and effectiveness. Forcing equal representation in all fields disregards natural aptitudes.
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introduction conclusion present
Consider adding a conclusion to summarize your points and reinforce your opinion.
supported main points
Provide more detailed examples to support your main points. This will strengthen your argument.
clear comprehensive ideas
Try to expand on the societal expectations discussed to provide a clearer understanding of their impact.
introduction conclusion present
The essay starts with a clear introduction, stating your opinion on the topic.
relevant specific examples
You provide examples, such as construction workers, to support your argument that women may face challenges in physically demanding jobs.
logical structure
The essay follows a logical structure, presenting points methodically.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • meritocracy
  • traditional roles
  • STEM fields (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • biological differences
  • physical capabilities
  • gender stereotyping
  • job suitability
  • skills and qualifications
  • diverse workforce
  • legal frameworks
  • societal progress
  • historical evidence
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