S. In some countries, it is becoming increasingly common for people to follow a vegetarian diet. Do the advantages of ths outweigh the disadvantages ?

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Vegetarian
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The vegetarian
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lifestyle nowadays is very common in some countries. The benefits
from
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of
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this
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lifestyle
are
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might be different for some people. I can not say which is more important
between
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the advantages or the opposite.
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, I would like to
eliberate
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elaborate
deliberate
my
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perspective for both of those. The
advantages
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advantage
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of doing
vegetarian
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a vegetarian
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diet
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, it helps us to reduce weight faster. It is because vegetables are
content
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a content
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of
vitamin
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vitamins
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and
fiber
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fibre
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that helps us
healthier
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be healthier
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and
also
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improve
digestion
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our digestion
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system. It is clear because numerous
doctor
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doctors
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and health
experties
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expertise
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are commonly discuss
about
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apply
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it and
ever
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every
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on our plate two times measure
from
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of
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carbs, especially for those who are doing
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diet
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a diet
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lifestyle.
However
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, it
is
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apply
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also
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giving
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has
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negative impacts because we are not able to
fulfill
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the protein needs which
is
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are
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important for
muscles
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muscle
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growth. Muscle is very necessary in our body because it
is protect
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protects
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our bones from
ostheoporoshis
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osteoporosis
. In brief,
vegetarian
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a vegetarian
the vegetarian
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diet
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is the fastest method to have weight loss. It is clear because we reduce protein and carbs.
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, it is not good for our
muscles
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muscle
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growth. The best
diet
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should be
doing
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by
balanced
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the nutrition between carbs, fat, protein and fiber.
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coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your essay with clear paragraphs for each point. This will enhance your argument and make your essay easier to follow.
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Provide specific examples or evidence to support your points. This will strengthen your arguments and provide more depth to your essay.
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Make sure to address the part of the question regarding the comparison between advantages and disadvantages more directly and explicitly state which outweighs the other.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present, helping to frame your essay's key points.
task achievement
You have correctly identified and discussed both advantages and disadvantages of a vegetarian diet.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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