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Nowadays people use bicycles less as a form of transport. Why is this the case? What can we do to encourage people to use bicycles more?

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Today, there are several types of vehicles, which
people
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use
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 without a doubt.
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, society prefers to
use
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 other
variety
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varieties
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 of
transports
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transport
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 rather than
bicycles
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.
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 essay will discuss why it is occurring
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 way and what we can do to encourage citizens to
use
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bicycles
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. There are many reasons why citizens
less
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are less
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 likely to
use
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bike
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bikes
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 as
form
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 of transportation.
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first,
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they may prefer to
use
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 faster and
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more comfortable
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transports
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transport
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,
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 as cars, trains and
palnes
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planes
. These options allow
people
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 to travel particularly over long distances or in adverse weather conditions.
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regularly using
bicycles
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 in daily life requires good breath and physique.
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, some
people
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 who have health issues make their
choise
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choice
on
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of
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other mode
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another mode
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 of transportation. To reverse
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 trend, governments and communities must take active steps to popularize cycling.
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FIrstly
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, creating opportunity is crucial. Bike
lines
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lanes
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,
bicycle
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and bicycle
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parkings
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parking
making
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make
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 cycling safer and
convenient
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more convenient
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.
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, public awareness or
advertisment
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advertising
play
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plays
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significant
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a significant
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 role in that. Highlighting
advantages
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the advantages
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 of cycling,
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 as health benefits can motivate some
people
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 to
use
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such
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mode
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modes
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 of
transports
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transport
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.
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, the introduction of a
bicycle sharing
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bicycle-sharing
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 program can make
bicycles
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 more accessible and attractive to a wider audience. In conclusion, the decline in bicycle usage can be attributed to the speed of other transport options, health
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problems
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, and societal preferences. By addressing these challenges through improved infrastructure, awareness campaigns, and financial incentives, governments and communities can encourage
people
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 to embrace
bicycles
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 as a practical and sustainable form of transport.
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task achievement
Try providing more specific examples and evidence to strengthen your argument. This could include statistics, quotes, or case studies about bicycle use.
coherence cohesion
Some sentences contain minor grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues or typos. Re-read your essay or use grammar checking tools for improvement.
coherence cohesion
Ensure consistency in capitalization, especially with names and sentence beginnings.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which makes your essay organized and easy to follow.
task achievement
You addressed both parts of the task by discussing reasons for reduced bicycle use and potential solutions to encourage cycling.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes a logical sequence of ideas, making it easy to understand your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable transport
  • cycling infrastructure
  • bike lanes
  • bike-sharing programs
  • traffic calming measures
  • commute
  • subsidies
  • physical exertion
  • environmental benefits
  • safety regulations
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